A line in flight…

From me to You

Words are on the flight tonight

I’m on a hot chase too

I can make do with a phrase or two

To tell a tale of two

Of the two who never met

Of the two who never part

 …but words are on a flight tonight

Sitting among the cedar leaves

The crickets play love on the bank of the sea

Sighs of lovers in the waves on the sea

Many are the agonies of a lonefarer

Such is the fate of a forgotten lover

I will like to tell you a tale

But words are on a flight tonight

and am on a hot chase too!

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7 thoughts on “A line in flight…”

  1. I really like the initial idea behind this piece, though it could still do with some work. A little more punctuation would be useful to add structure. You need to tell your reader how the piece is supposed to be read, where they are meant to pause and where the piece is supposed to flow into itself.
    It is also a little fragmented, the lines don’t always follow one another, though this may have been your intention. If it was, maybe look again at the topic of the poem, do you want to created something fragmented and jumpy, to reflect the dreams which change suddenly, or would you rather created the smooth transitions that follow in other dreams where the world around you shifts almost noticeably?

  2. This:
    Sighs of lovers in the waves on the sea

    Many are the agonies of a lonefarer

    Such is the fate of a forgotten lover======= is…. brilliant!!

    Well done, Williams! 🙂

    Subhan Zein

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