Caught in the middle of it all
Barred from my village by this wall
Unity our virtue, given a great fall
Stranger what brought you here?
Don’t cross, so you don’t ere
Boy: Look, and see my scar
They didn’t come cowing around
I’v got my own share on this ground
Tell: Bismarck was here, roaming this wall’s surround.
Dear Writerly Pals, I couldn’t do a story today because of a saddening news I heard yesterday but I came up with this form of Haiku –let me know what you think of it, anyway. Thanks!
This story is a contribution to the Friday Fictioneers at Madison Woods‘ blog. Where a crush of writers are inspired by her photo prompt to express a story in 100 words. Please, click to find other stories.
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Charles, My heart goes out to you as you hear saddening news–I send good thoughts your way. Your haiku was nicely written–what form is it?
Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html
I wouldn’t know…waiting on expert on it to tell me how well off the mark I am…Thanks for your concern!
I am sorry for your loss.
Your take on the prompt is both unique and captivating. Well done.
Here is the link to mine:
http://366degree.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/forget-him-not/
Cheers!
I am Glad you thought so…Thanks for stopping by!
This is not exactly Haiku, but a nicely told tale – a fable almost and very interestingly and colourfully written. Because you are in Africa, your stories always bring us the flavour of your surroundings, which gives them a special rendering.
Thank you,
Laura
I guessed as much, that’s why I called it a form (failing to categorize it properly) but this story is one about international politics…you may want to look deeper at it. Yes, maybe I have told it in the light of my world view. Thanks for stopping by.
Hey See… Always sad to lose a friend… especially young ones.
Your story was Haikuish enough for me… I won’t be counting syllables today.
Your opening lines brought to mind Neil Gaiman’s ‘Stardust’.
http://tedstrutz.com/2012/03/30/flash-fridayfictioneers-lost-opportunity/?preview=true&preview_id=795&preview_nonce=5782857aeb
Thanks Ted…am glad you made it here…over to your now.
I’m sorry for your loss. And from the northern cold lands of Scandinavia, I’ll send good thoughts your way.
Your poem was great, it did throw me off a little in the second paragraph, but all in all it was wonderful.
//Cae (http://wp.me/suGD7-parallel)
Thanks Caely for the visit here…the story is about the reincarnation of Bismarck, the Germanic states unifier during the cold war…the 2nd stanza has a small boy warning him to back off from one of the divides between the west and east german states…Imagine!
Greetings from the Midwest! So sorry for your sad news. I enjoyed your profound poem.
My story is at http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com/2012/03/better-than-hunting.html?showComment=1333135984672#c3753053997183551805
Thanks for your comment here…your reminds me of high school tales and brought back good memories…Well done
Sorry to hear the sad news. I too enjoyed your poem.
My story: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/sins-of-a-father/
Thanks, welcome to my world…
I’m not sure that really counts as haiku (especially since haiku is based more on rhythm than on rhyme), but I still quite enjoyed the poem itself. I loved the meaning you brought to the barbed wire fence.
http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-abandoned/
Thanks for stopping by, am glad you liked it
So sorry to hear about your sad news. Hope everything is well. Loved the haiku. I admire people who can do any form of poetry. Not an easy thing as far as I’m concerned.
Thanks for stopping by!
Your voice is unique and the cadence of your verse is almost musical. I enjoyed it.
Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/flash-fiction-friday/
Your was CLASSIC!
You always bring a taste of another world to these prompt gatherings, and this is no exception. Very atmospheric. So sorry for your loss.
Thanks Sandra for your love and care…
Hi Charles, nice to meet you! I’m sorry to read of the loss of your two friends, You eulogized them beautifully and my thought is that anyone who knows them and reads it would be happy with your words. I enjoyed your poetry and found the three verses (I’m not sure if they’re technically Haiku) very powerful.
Thanks Mike, Welcome to my world!
I can feel the sadness and loss and maybe some anger in your poem. It is frustrating when you don’t get a chance to say goodbye and are left with your memories and hole in your heart.
Powerful poem…
Really?!…well, thank you for stopping by.
Maybe this says much of my mood as well as Bismarck’s– sure to have felt that way if he had visited Germany and met the Iron Curtain in the cold war era, seeing the unified Germany he fought so divided! Thanks again!
Hi Charles: My deepest condolences for your loss. I found your poem to be meaningful, intense and emotional. Hope it was cathartic as well during this difficult time. Here’s mine:
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
Thanks for your concern…I’m deeply grateful!
Dear Charles,
‘….and the vizier handed the Sultan a plain, unadorned gold ring and engraved upon the inside were the words; “This too shall pass.”‘
Cold comfort now, I know, but your dear friends live on in your heart and in your writing. It’s the best any of us can hope for.
Your haiku/tone poem was great and, as others have said far more eloquently, brought to us a taste of a warm breeze of a distant land.
Peace,
Doug
(And thanks for the comments on my work this week. I add my link only on the off chance I may thus meet some of your friends. (A friend of yours is a friend of mine. Aloha, D.)
Hey Doug,
Such a love as this still exists? I grateful for your soothing, balmy words of comfort…Your comments have come to always mean a bunch to much…Thanks for sharing with me!
Thanks for sharing, Charles. It was surprising how well I was able to connect to this poem with a short length.
I don’t know if I understood exactly what it all meant, but sometimes we don’t need to.
Very well done, and I wish you the best during your difficult time.
Thanks for the visit here…It’s about a reincarnated Bismarck visiting a divided Germanic state after all he fought for during the unification…one of those things my classes of history left me is to think of iron curtain when i see a wired fence…Thanks again!
Very sorry to hear of sad times, See. Thank you for your kind words and sharing your poetic tale. I’m not the best at understanding the nuances of poetry, but I take away the sometimes bewildering dance of cultures, borders, politics, and even war. Nicely done.
I am very sorry for your loss, Charles. I hope good memories will comfort you. Your poetry was beautiful.
I’m sorry to hear of your loss. I’m sure both girls are equally proud of you.
& I thought “Cowing around” was very cute 🙂
Thanks, i appreciate your visit and comments…Thanks!
I read your other post first and it was a beautiful eulogy for your friends and would be a last post you could rest easy on if it were your last. I’m sorry for your loss.
Your poem was well-written, and I’m sure there are meanings in it I’m not understanding, but I liked it even if I don’t know the rest of the story behind it.
Thanks!